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My holiday Yesterday was the Ching Ming Festial. We went shopping with friends in near our neighborhood in the morning. We bought a number of fruits and snacks. In the afternoon, we watch TV together. We were very happy. My mother come from company when we watching TV. She took a number of peanatas. t's my favorite food. In the everning . We friends left.we say :"goodbey" together. Yesterday is general,but I was very happy.