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My holiday Yesterday was the Ching Ming Festial. We went shopping with friends in near our neighborhood in the morning. We bought a number of fruits and snacks. In the afternoon, we watch TV together. We were very happy. My mother came from the company when we watch TV. She took a number of peanuts. It's my favorite food. We friend left in the night. we say :"goodbey" together Yesterday is general,but I was very happy.