GRE写作Issue模拟题8:Pursuing One's Ideals

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Pursuing One's Ideals Our parents want to be the one they wish.They spare no effect to educate us, giving us the best thing within their ability range.And other people such as our friends, teachers or some celebrities influence our thinking and behaviours. Perhaps someone would force us to do something we are unwilling to .But all of them really can define and change us? In my point of view, I do agree that our individuals can pursue our ideals in spire of the influence to ourselves. For one thing,although the society shape us as a society-adopted man, we still have free to do the right thing we think it right. In the process of fitting into the society, we build our character, not for other people or the invironment, but for ourserves.What if we have no right to pursue our dream?If we just want to stuff ourselves, I think the lifetime is meaningless.For the other thing, it is believed that society that defines us and our attitudes. it is definition for the whole society, not just a few people. People are different, it is impossible to find out two persons with totally the same.So just be yourself. You must clear that what you truly want to become.puesuing your ideals will never leave the regret in your lifetime. that is what the meaningful life is.The thing can shape you but never overcome you.