文中衔接词和过渡词使用的很棒;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;作者在句法层面做的很棒。
Football, my favorite sport, been showed fancy to by me by chance till I picked up a football when in the way to home, then I played with my friends, as a result, so deeply being fond of playing it that I began viewing it my desirable sport. Off and on, I practice as well as play football game with my classmates. Moreover, BackHame, who comes from England, is my adorable football star. Likewise, I have a burning desire for being a professional football player.