2013-2014年高考英语卷写作表达题目范文汇总(91):学生使用手机

文中词汇表达较丰富恰当，高级词汇使用稍显不足；文章结构不够严谨，应增加过程性词汇的使用；文中简单句过多，建议增加长句。

Dear Editor, I’m a senior high student. Now many students use mobile phones.when there have any students,they carry iPhone become to school.The first ,they think that is a fashion,The second,they to find they's parents easy.but i don't that think so. Someone take iPhone in the class,often listen the music in the classroom.They will undermine the classroom discipline.And someone they write massage take iPhone in learning.Wast the many time,but,that think which me is a nothing.But,they already influence with me. i need be quiet，because，class is a learn the local. The school take a rule 'spot iPhone .' Yours sincerely Li Hua