文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;衔接成分偏少;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用。
A trip Zhejing, it is the city which I know in China. The weather is pleasant. I enjoyed spending my vacation in here. I went to Zhejing in this summer vacation. I went to beach, zoo, aquarium and west lake in Hangzhou with my family. one of the famous lake is west lake in hangzhou.I like it very much . There are lots of willow on lakeside. There are same swans on the lake. The sky is bule.The lake is green. In addition, there are many snacks in west lake in Hangzhou.The best food that i have eat is the barbecue of the west lake.I was happy for this trip.