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Tomb-sweeping Day is one of the twenty-four solar terms, usually located about April 4th and 6th. People have celebrated Tomb-sweeping Day since Eastern Zhou desteney, which have almost 2500 years history until now. After Tomb-sweeping Day, temperature rise gradually, ranfall will be increase, which is the trace that it’s the important time for farmer to arrange their farm work. At the same time, Tomb-sweeping Day is a good time to go hiking, people outing and having a lots of entertainment and activity. The most important thing is Tomb-sweeping Day is a big day to memerize ancient and relatives who pass away.