高一英语作文模拟题:向游客介绍南京

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NanJing, which is the capital city of JiangSu province, located in southeastern China, has a population of approximate 5 million. Moreover, NanJing has a long history of more than 2400 years, during this time, there have been 10 dynasties chosen it as the capital city. Amazingly, there are a great many famous scenes such as XuanWu lake, JiMing temple, stone castle and so forth, which are considered as components of spectacular beauty of NanJing. Besides, as well as a overwhelming number of modernizing factories, there are also numerous buildings built in the this city. That's what a wonderful paradise NanJing is!