可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;文中从句使用过少;文中有较多拼写错误,请作者增加词汇量的积累。
I have a good friend,her name is lili. She is 8 year old,and she have a short cut.She is taller than me.She is good at study,and always get good ponts in her study.I like her very much.She play with me often.When I don't know something,she will find out with me.