小学一年级英语作文:Jim's family

文章层次清晰分明，但是文中很少使用过渡词和衔接词；作者词汇量偏少，不过单词拼写方面做的不错；句式变化不明显，另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例。

I have a photo of Jim's family on my desk.In the left of the photo is my best friend Jim.He and me studies in the elementary school near my house.He is good at playing tennis,and I admire him very much.Next to Jim in the photo is Jim's father.He is a thouthful ,kind and generous people. He work for a company dealing with lawsuits in the center of my city,in the other words ,he is a consultant of law.He is always very busy. The left person in the photo is Jim's mother. she is a housewife, she always smiles to me when I come to her home.What a lovely family they are!