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作者词汇积累很好，不过单词拼写方面要继续努力；多多注意文中错误的句子；衔接成分太少，文章结构欠佳。
Welcome to my hometown,the beautiful city Jilin.it's my plesure.I hope you will be feel as yourself hometown on the other day. First,we will going to the Songhuajiang.The Songhuajiang across tow provinces about Heilongjiang and Jilin.It's verv longer.Spescialy along the bank rime very beautiful in winter. As well as we are boteing in there. Cecond,we can go to the longtan montain,in sumer,it will become green all montains.The sunrise there is special. Finally,we will gonging to Beishan park.There are many intresting things.Such as boating flowers,montains,and most inportant Boddha. I hope you have a fun.
