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Recently the rise in phenomenon of online shopping has aroused popular concern, even become a fasion. There is no doubt that shoppong online is more convinece, and the goods also much cheaper than that in center. But every corn have two sides, it also has negetive effect. For one thing, the time people sit infront the computer increase, conversely, they have less time to do excise. For another thing, it really crush the physical store's income even let them to close down. Still another, the quality of commodies from online are uncertain. It's obviously,everythings have its benifit and disadvantage. As far as I am concerned, it's better for people to buy the needs in person. And I really hope the online seller could promiss their commodies quality.
