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with the improvement of science and technology,internet has become an indispensable tool for us.As it can be employed into any fields,we are more likely to rely on internet to develop our interpersonal communication. there exist a great deal of social services and interpersonal websites,which may result in both positive impact and negative impact to people. first we can keep touch with our friends more conviniently and frequently by clicking the mouse and sending a message. second the various ways of conmmunication such as sending voice message,sharing photos and sending e-mails add the joy to communiation. while the negative aspects can never be ignored we are dependent on those tools but lose the ability of communicate face-to-face.many people would rather bend over their screen than show their feelings in reality. and we are closely tied with the world that we slip the social website lest losing some informationn seemed valuable.
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