文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Dear Sir or Madam, I am among the faithful audience of your radio station.I am writing the letter for the purpose of inquiring about the pop music program which is very popular in our country. For one thing,it will be greatly appreciated if you can give a brief introduction about the pop stars before playing their songs.For another,I always miss your wonderful program in the afternoon,so I'd like to know your timetable of the music program.If it is convenient for you,please send a timetable to me. Thanks a lot for your due attention to this letter which is wasting of you a lot of time reading it.I look forward to your reply at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely, Zhang Wei
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