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There is a hottest discussion weather we should concel the spring festival evening party of CCTV. Different people hold various opinions. Some people hold the view that we should keep on hold the evening party. Because the spring festival is for each chinese the most important festival . Therefore, It is a good way for us to celebrate the spring festival if we can hold a lively and funny spring festival evening party. According to the CCTV both the domestic and overseas chinese can enjoy the happiness of spring festival together.But the other people hold the opposite view that we should concel the spring festival. With the improvement of living standards, most of chinese family would like to travel outside,as a result of many people can not allocate their time to watch the evening party. In my opinion, we had better hold the spring festival evening party in order that we can inherit and develop the excellent culture traditions.In addition, the culture sector should take some effective measures to attract the attention toward the evening party , especially the youngsters.In addition, the CCTV should improve the form of evening party and enhance the enjoyment.