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My favorite sport Everyone has his or her favorite sport, so do I. Now I want to introduce to you my favorite sport, that is football. I like playing football so deeply for an unforgettable story which happened by accident. One day when I was on my way home, I picked up a football lying on the road nearby a playground, since then I have often gone with my friends to play football and I have fallen in love playing football. Now I always hang out with my friends to do the football training and we usually got some chances to participate in the football game. Like many other people, I have my own football star named Beckham, who is known for his excerllent skills in playing football. And I hope one day I can be a football player just like Beckham!