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I'm so glad to hear you can visit my hometown.Actually my home have many intereting things.i hope you can go through them with me.Now,let me gove you a introduction for my hometown. first,there hve many historical culture,it's our the development of human beings.at there,you can good kown chinse.second,the delicious food is neseccery.there have all kinds of snakes.you should have a large appciate to eat as many as you can.thirdly,you also can