加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;文中用词稍显贫乏,单词拼写还要加强;过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富,层次欠清晰。
My teacher is our science teacher. He is strong.He has black hair. He has big eyes. He has big noes.He often wear white shirt.He is so handsome. My teacher is kindly.He often teaches us many interesting knowledge.I like his class.This aftenoon has his science class.We all feel happy.This teacher is out teacher Kim.