3.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
作者高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间;文章层次较为清晰;可适当增加从句使用,注意极个别句子错误。
Honorable teacher and fellow students.I am Sandy ,a junior majoring in secretary.It is my honor to stand here to make you a speech.My topic is "Believe and beyond yourself". There is a famous saying goes"Attitude is altitude".It shows that it is our attitude determines whether we can overcome the difficulties we meet and succeed in whatever we want to do. There are many examples can prove that,such as Beethoven,who still could create rousing symphony after losing his hearing.Stephen Hawking,suffering from complete paralysis but achieved a great achievement in physcis.Recently,he opens the sina weibo to communicate with Chinese people.But who I am going to introduce to you is a woman director .I bet most of you heard about a TV serial "Fleet of time" whose Chinese name is "匆匆那年“.The way of her becoming a director is really tough.When she announced that she wanted ro be a director,nearly nobody supported her.Her parents forced her to give up and even her teacher implied her that she had no gift on it.However,she fought with all those doubt and negativity from others.She chose to follow her heart and believe her ownself,struggling really hard.After 7 years of efforts,she got paid.A few short films she made got prize and recognition.Later,she was invited to direct the 匆匆那年,which means that she became a professional director.And,today,an inspirational moive she directed,"Yesterday once more" which was written by a famous writer "刘同“was released.
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