3.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
文中词汇使用灵活,可是在高级词汇的积累上还要再接再厉;文中如若增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;文章层次较为清晰。
Honorable teacher and fellow students.I am Sandy ,a junior majoring in secretary.It is my honor to stand here to make you a speech.My topic is "Believe and beyond yourself". There is a famous saying going"Attitude is altitude".It shows that it is our attitude determines whether we can overcome the difficulties we meet and succeed in whatever we want to do. There are many examples can prove that,such as Beethoven,who still could create rousing symphony after losing his hearing.Stephen Hawking,suffering from complete paralysis but achieved a great achievement in physics.Recently,he opens the sina weibo to communicate with Chinese people.But who I am going to introduce to you is a woman director .I bet most of you heard about a TV serial "Fleet of time" whose Chinese name is "匆匆那年“.The way of her becoming a director is really tough.When she announced that she wanted ro be a director,nearly nobody supported her.Her parents forced her to give up and even her teacher implied her that she had no gift on it.However,she fought with all those doubts and negativities from others.She chose to follow her heart and believe her ownself,struggling really hard.After 7 years of efforts,she got paid.A few short films she made got prize and recognition.Later,she was invited to direct the 匆匆那年,which means that she became a professional director.And,today,an inspirational movie she directed,"Yesterday once more" which was written by a famous writer "刘同“was released.
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