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In our socity,more and more peple can make a bad choice in the bad environment.first,as we see,if you look a boy is surrounded by lots of man,you will think it is a thing that some bad consequence can come into being.In fact,they can be able to play jokes with the boy,or they only are the relatives of the boy. We can obtain news in many ways,by mobile phone,by newspaper,by talivation...But our seeing and hearing whether is the truth of news.There is no doubt that wu must have a judge for everthings. So we should spend more time beside we make a choice.
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