全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用;能够使用一些不错的从句;希望高级词汇的使用能更熟练一些,还要加强单词拼写的检查。
Nowdays,more and more people are likely to come to conclusion disvisable judging by what they see and what they hear.Not only do We always catch the surface of the phenomenon ,but also we don't pay more attention to those things.It's the fact that we are lack of thingking and just see a little of it .Most importantly ,it make negative influence of us as well as our society. From my point of view,we ought to be far away from conclusion that make up dilectly with what we see and what we hear.If we are accustomed to pay more attention to other's piontview rather than throught our cosideration,we'll abandon our application and analysization of konwledge. At the same time ,our brain will be lazy and advoid thingking .Worsely people of our society will bring a bad influence .It's undouble that our society will stay in a step and stop going. It's my sugggestion that we must find out the fact of the things .Consulting all kinds of people's view ,we should analysize what make it to be that . Finally we can easily cosidere various of factor and then drown up conclusion. We'd better to do someting and thing of it before you say about it.
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