字数:200满分:100分
采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;作者句法知识较为扎实,可增加复合句和从句使用;文章使用了较丰富的词汇表达,高级词汇的使用也较灵活多样。
As shown in the first picture,owing to the shelter,a flower growing vigorously,though it is raining and lightning in outsiad.Under the same situation,Howerver,the flower go to dead after the shelter has been removed, which was shown in the second picture. As we all know,with the rapid development of our economy and owing to the execution of the one-child policy,more and more parents endeavor to provides whatever their child thirst for,wherea most of childrens would never consider their parents and always take it for granted. with the time lapse and child grow up, they have to go competitive society to receive challenges.whereas they could not resolve anything but turn to their parent for help, even selecting university was arranged by their parents.they living under the shelter provided by their parents. Unquestionabely,parent's limitless and blind care finally spoil their child. From what has been shown above, it is the high time to make some change.Firstly,parents should transform mind and let their children to solve problems via themselves.In addition,parents should teach their child that what they possess are not windfall and that they should cherish their life provided by their parents.