字数:200满分:100分
采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;可适当增加从句的使用;文章词汇表达丰富,高级词汇使用较丰富,但拼写检查要重视。
As shown in the first picture, owing to the shelter,a flower growing vigorously, though it is raining and lightning in outsaid. Howerver, the flower soon go to dead when the shelter has been removed and was directly exposed to rain and storm, which was shown in the second picture.Therefore, we can easily come a conclusion that greenhouse flower can not withstand rain and storm. As we all know, with the rapid development of economy and owing to the execution of the one-child policy, more and more parents endeavor to offer whatever their child thirst for, whereas most of only child would never consider their parents and always take it for granted. with the time lapse and child grow up, they have to go competitive society to accept challenges.But they could not resolve anything but turn to their parent for help, even selecting university was arranged by their parents.they living under the protection maked by their parents. Unquestionably, parent's limitless and blind care turn out to be spoils their child. According to what has been shown above, it is the high time to make some change. Firstly, parents should transform mind and encourage their children to solve problems via themselves. In addition, parents should teach their child that what they possess are not windfall and that they should cherish their life created by their parents.