作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;句法方面做的很棒,加强复杂句的使用;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;请注意分段。
We can't leave Internet in our life right now even the world. On internet the people can learn many things what they want.for ex-sample,most of people interesting in them free time to chat and internet bring us a lot of in formation in time and let we know how life is . and also make us not going to leave it ,but somebody use internet to play game after they forget or want not to do them job .study.many things lose. Somebody use internet to get claims That we don't like .so,if we can distance bad and we will be get more and more what we like