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as we know,The Dragon Boat Festival has been 2000 years in china,whith been set for commemorating an ancient patriotic poet named quyuan dead by framming.he came out with opinion of against qin empire.at first time,the people just threw some rice and meet into the river for keeping fish away from quyuan,and drive boats to found his body,but they had no gain, as time past this tradition has changed,people started put foods in bamboo leaves,and hold a contest with the dragon boat on yangzi river.children who born in this day should take a showe use the water be soaked by ai grass,then they will be blessed.nowadays, we do also keep those tradition in the dragon boat festival,and quyuan is no longer be a patriotic symble in the area of yangzi rever,but be the hero of china,we all celebrate the day now.