过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩。
With the society rapidly developing, more and more people live a great life. However, it is terrified for them to be it which will affect more people to forget their future. Because they don't choose to achieve their dream rather than they will live a corrupt life. Meanwhile, not only lose life forward, but also they may lose some friends. If they don't want to go outside with friends, they will be far away from them. There are some examples that my friends lose life confidence, which stays at home rather than talking with us. It is very difficult for him to talk with us. Because we don't have a common with each other. It is very embarrassed for us when we go outside. In my pinion, we should do some valuable things. Such as do reading, do exercise and spend more time with our family, because family needs warm and together. In a word, I wish everyone could develop a good habit so that we could live a great life.