单词拼写做的不错,文中词汇表达贫乏;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;连接词过少,建议增加衔接词汇的积累。
A famous pianist Lang Lang was a famous pianist.He was born in ShenYang.He studied playing the piano in his three-year-old.In his 14-year-old,she studied music in the USA.he had big achievement in music,he gave concerts in the world,and he showed up music with some famous musician in the world.He won in many music races.His music was so well!