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I am glad to introduce my hometown. In recent years,my home town change a lot. In the past,there was a plenty of trees. The river was clean.Thus,you can see fish playing in the river. But houses was small and roads was narrow. Persons need to work harding,but still was poor. Nowdays,you can see skyscraper anywhere.And traffic is developing. However,the industry lead to environment became bad. As a reslut,there was not a number of trees and fish was disappeared. Therefore,it is important that to manage environment.