文中过渡词和衔接词使用较少;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;文中词汇表达较为丰富准确,但存在单词拼写错误。
I am glad to introduce my hometown. In recent years,my home town change a lot. In the past, there was a plenty of trees that make place bacame beautiful. The river was clean.Thus,you can see fish playing in the river. But houses were small and roads was narrow. Persons were poor that need to work harding. Nowdays,you can see skyscraper anywhere.And traffic is developing. However, the industry lead to environment became bad. As a reslut, there was not a number of trees and fish was disappeared. Therefore, it is important that to manage the environment.