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Every year, I have been looking forward to holidays.On holidays ,there is enough time for activities I want to do.I would like to travel with my parents,or to sleep in my cozy bedroom whenever I want.It is an exciting thing!Holidays also benefit us.On the other hand ,we can do things which we can't do at ordinary times , for we have enough time!On the other hand,we can relax ourself,and take a good rest .So I deadly enjoy holidays very much.