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My dream job is become a director Because I think director is a glamorous work.What’s more I have many chance to meet many superstars,including domestic and foreign.The job of director is full of imagination . My favorite director is stephen chow. he is good at direct comedy .I have been watched his many movie ,such as A Chinese odyssey, Kung Fu Hail the judge,his movie inspire me so much and bring me a lot of thinking stephen chow play a important role in my chilhood and boyhood That is important reason that I make a dream of director .Director make a great movie is a program that pass on culture ,so director is a part of culture disseminator. How about become an director,I think I have to learn many skill. Firstly ,I must be good at photography ,used different lense to collect images. Secondly, I think I have to learn some knowledge about CAD,at least learn the basic of CAD or photoshop. Thirdly,an out standing director have a sharp observation.so I should train my observation by pay attention to detail of diary,judge someone inner thoughts by micro expressions.The last but not least ,Nobody could remove my belief. Thought I still not have conditions become a director yet. But if you didn’t believe yourself and no think about what thing is you really wanna, how to make you dream come true.