2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

作者词汇表达较丰富准确，不过学术词汇的积累还有很大的空间；行文稍显不流畅，应增加文中衔接词的使用；若增加一些从句的使用，文章会取得更好的成绩。

How Should Parents Help Children To Be Independent? In fact,it has been traditional that parents do everything for their children,including the habits,the school,even the people they marry with.Though, the problem has decreased with the social’s development,the the penomonen still consists in many families in China. For children,it’s harmful that parents give children too much love.I think,to avoid children rely on parents too much ,and as a result they loss independence,there are some ideas parents must know. On the other hand,parents should let children do some housework what they can do from the young age.Besides,to cultivate children’s thinking ability is necessary.On the other hand,please do not replace children to suffer something hard,because you can’t take step with them on their whole life. In conclusion.it damages children if parents give too much love to them ,even the damage effects them whole life/