从句不足,简单句比重高;文中用词稍显贫乏,单词拼写方面也要加强;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构欠佳。
As you know,playing football is my favourite hobby.In a special chance,let me like it.On my way home,I found a football.Afterwards,I played with my friends.Then I fell in love football.In my free time,I often train or compete with my classmates.My favourite fooeball star is 贝克汉姆,who is English.Now,I dream of being a professional football player.