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i have a friend. his name is xulin.his my middle school classmate.he is a very big fat guy,but he is very clever and funny.he likes playing football every afternoon.and he also likes playing go.we are play go every sunday. when he wins the go,he always makes face to me . so it will make me very unhappy.