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可适当增加从句的使用，注意文中的一些小错误；上下文衔接不流畅，文章结构不严谨；文中缺乏丰富的词汇表达，但词汇拼写要更加认真。
Welcome to our country. It is the most famous that the Great wall in China.Every year,thousands of foreign people go there to visit.So,i will take you to visit it. The Great Wall has a long history,it shows chiese ancient people's intelligence.At that times,in order to build The Great Wall,Qingshihuang takes so many people and plenty of money on it. in the past,built it is in order to pretect our country and against the .nowaday,The Great Wall is not only prevent other people ,but provide tourist to visit.it has beautiful seneries and wide view . In short,The Geat Wall is a present of our country.
