采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;作者在高级词汇方面还有很大的空间,还要注意单词拼写;能够使用一些不错的从句。
Living in a peaceful age when the violate events have been shaply decreased by 2010, we never fail to figure out that the idex of happy is much higher than before. Howere, there were some violate problemes happened in school recently which include senion school, high school and university. How to improve school safety is a crucial Campus should be the most safety place where students learn knowledge in and learn how to be a useful person for sociaty. So keep campus safe we should pose following instructions. To begin with, students must have a higher safe conscious, such as don't get out alongly at night. To addition, impose the security guard is also necessary including don't allow strangers come in school or they must pass out ID or student csrd. Only doing these can we make sure the school safety.