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Living in a peaceful age when the violate events have been sharply decreased by 2010, we never fail to figure out that the happiness index is much higher than before. Howevre, there were some incident of violence happened in school recently which include senior school, high school and university. How to improve school safety is a crucial Campus should be the most safety place where students learn knowledge in and learn how to be a useful person for society. So keep campus safe we should enhance following measures. To begin with, students must have a higher safe conscious, such as don't get out along at night. To addition, imposing the security guard is also necessary including don't allow strangers come in school or they must pass out ID or student card. Only doing these can we make sure the school safety.