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文中词汇使用较丰富，但高级词汇使用太少；恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词，衔接手法做的很棒；若注意一些句子错误，文章会更漂亮。
Dear Tim Hello,Tim,how are you going ? I am so happy to hear that you are going to my hometown.Next,I would like to introduce the most beautiful place which would maked you supprised ,I bet that you must like it. As a matter of fact ,In spite of it is not a famous place,It is the place I like most whenever what happened. It is a nice sea with a big beach where bring me up .It looks very mysterious when the son arise from the horizon,and you can walk in the beach ,collect the shells ,seize crabs , enjoy the touch of the sun shine,what's more , you can also bring your swimming suit to play with waves or surfing. It's that all ,NO.There are more funny things we can do . After the ebb,you can find many kind of marine products that is very delicious when you dig them out ,you can see the fishes swimming around you ,but they are too flexible to catch them.when you are so tired that you feel hungry ,I will bring you to my home and invite you to taste the delicious sea food! Do you move ?Let's starting a nice trip.
