加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;文中有较多拼写错误,请作者增加词汇量的积累;上下文衔接手法不熟练,没有能够有效的使用衔接词。
I have a busy day. I get up at 6:30. First, i help my mother do house work, i wash dishs. Second, i play pingpang with my classmates. Then, I watch TV at home. Thouth, today I do so manything and feel tired.But i am happy. Because , I stay with my mother and do something she want and i can do something i like.