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I have g busy day. I get up at 6:30. First, i help my mother do houst work, i wsah dishs. Second, i play pingpang with my classmates. Then, i watch TV at home. Thouth, today i do so many things and feel tired.But i am happy. Because , I stay with my mother and do somthing she wants and i can do something i like.