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Living in an age when the techniligy is developing more and more fast, we can never fail to figure out the fact that online shopping has already been a strain of our life. It is a symbol of modern life. There are so many benifite for us to shop online as all kinds of things can we buy on the Internate. Especially for some people who are so business that have no time to go shopping. Howere some oline shopping problems are revealed by buyers. For example, the new reaerch finded that the most problem is the worse quality of goods. we can't touch the closes, so only when we receive the things can we konw the quality.
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