上下文衔接稍显不流畅;句法知识较好,但需加强句式变化;文中拼写错误比较多,同时请注意积累词汇量。
Hello,eyeryone! School has a activity about protecting environment.Today I provide some advice for protecting environment.First,we was born both in the world,we should protect environment.Second,environment pollution is bad for ours health,so we must protect environment for ours health.Third,environment better could make peoples heathier,we have big duty for protecting envirmental.So we should have a big change,we should both protect environment.