作者词汇积累很好,不过单词拼写方面要继续努力;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳;注意下文中出现的错误句子。
my hometown is located in tongren guizhou province.If my foregin firend want to goning to my hometown and the first, i will take him to tongeren`s most famous fanjing mountains.There are a lot of golden monkeys 、beautiful flowers and maitreya.In a word, in my heart fanjing mountains is pefect. The second,i will take him to my center city ,there are many food,for example, green bean powder、crispy rice powder、snowbailling usury、rice crust、roll powder、sticky rice、fried samples and so on.