语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;熟练的使用了从句和复杂句;文中拼写错误较多,平时练习过程中应注意词汇量的积累。
firstly,i think we can small thing which is contribution to our socility.starting from ourselves.sush as leifeng,we all appreciate him because he make great progress to our people last but not least, we should help other peope, to make our nation achieve great boom and ourworld in peace and all of you are happy everday