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How Will AI Affect Our Life Months ago, Lee Sedol, the World GO Champion, was defeated by Google's AlphaGo, which has once again made AI a hot topic. Some claim that the AI can benefit us from many aspects, while others are against it. As far as I'm concerned,the disadvantages far outweigh the advantages for the following reasons: First of all, with the rise of the AI, 15 countries in the world decides to provide fewer jobs in the future. So it's likely to find many ordinary people getting unemployed. Second, it will threats people's normal life once the AI is used by some evil men and gets rise to chaos. Moreover, because the AI takes up things we did before and we get nothing to do, gradually, we will get far away from our militant spirts and our minds will be enslaved eventually. All in all, it is necessary for us to get acquainted with the AI's potential dangers although it indeeds give our benefits. Even, it's not exaggerated to say the AI is bound to govern human races if we still ignore the perils the AI brings to us.