2010年12月英语四级作文真题:让孩子独立

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Dear all, I am writing the E-mail to have everyone who has amply love informed that our class intends to hold a charity sale for those children who are in great need of help. The charity sale scheduled at 2:30 p.m. on Saturday(March,16,2013)will be held at the Building No.2 behind the Main Hall.You are so welcome to attend the event and bring your donations such as study articles and daily necessities for the charity sale.All the money raised from the activity and those items that are not sold out on the sale event will be donated to Beiguan Primary School,Daming county,Hebei Province to help the students who need help. Thanks for your attention to the E-mail.Remember your donation could help improve a kid's quality life. Yours sincerely, Li Ming