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2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

发布时间:2013-05-17 11:41浏览次数:9700
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题目 On Excessive Packaging
要求
1.目前许多商品存在过度包装的现象
2.出现这一现象的原因
3.我对这一现象的看法和建议
字数:120满分:100分
用户的作文(系统评分83.5分
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拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;使用了部分简单的长难句,可适当增加一些复杂的长句;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。

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How Should Parents Help Children To Be Independent? In fact,it has been traditional that parents do everything for their children,including the habits,the school,even the people they marry with.The phenomenon still consists in many families in China,though the problem has decreased with the social’s development. For children,it’s harmful that parents give children too much love.I think,to prevent children from relying on parents too much,and as a result they get lost independence,there are some ideas parents must know. On the other hand,parents should let children do some housework what they can do from the young age.Besides,to cultivate children’s thinking ability is necessary.On the other hand,please do not replace children to suffer something hard,because you can’t take steps with them on their whole life. In conclusion,it damages children if parents give too much love to them,even the damage effects them on the whole life.

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