文中词汇表达灵活性要提高,希望能较熟练地使用高级词汇;行文流畅,但衔接词比较少;适当增加一些从句的使用,会为文章添彩。
I knew of your new product of no 5670 during the exhibition held in New York on the date of Dec. 15th-21rid and I was quite interest in it. please can you send us a price list and an instruction for this. thanks for your attention and we except establish business relationships with you we are looking forward to your early reply.