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语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；句子错误偏多，建议修改；请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度，且要加强拼写检查；请注意分段；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开；连词使用偏少。
we can see from the picture that there are lots of fishes gether in crouds in the sea but only one boat in 1900 but when in 1995 the situation is on the countrary group of boats on the sea there is only one fish the enormous comparison makes us realise that fishing is already out of control it has greatly hurted the fishing resouces under this situation the government should take measures to conserve the fishing industry with limitting the size of the fishing net the frequency of fishing and so on the most important is that people should be told if they want to fishing from now on they must understand the significance of potecting fishing resouce
